Comments on: Clara Barton Short Story

By: Sarah

Sarah — Mon, 23 Feb 2009 16:51:54 +0000

Hey Sarah!Umm… I have a question for you. I have a speech I have to do about technology in the civil war and for my person i’m going to act like is Clara Barton. So did she or didn’t she use some technology in the civil war to help the soldiers get their cuts and shots bandaged up or do you not know? If you could help me out that would be fantastic! I hope you can! Bye! Ohhh It’s due tomorrow!Okay! LOL! BYE!

By: Scott (Thespian70)

Scott (Thespian70) — Mon, 26 Jan 2009 14:00:06 +0000

What a beautifully written story! You have a highly developed style that is incredibly polished for a young lady of your age. Many of my 11th grade students couldn’t even touch what you are doing right now.

Allow me to ellaborate a little bit more. You have a nice pace and flow to your story; what I mean is that it moves the reader forward, carrying us along like we are on a raft floating down a river. Your syntax (sentence structure) is varied to alter that flow from time to time, keeping your reader engaged and from becoming board with what you are sharing.

Keep up the good work! Perhaps one of these days you should look in to submitting some of your work to Scholastic Writing.

All my best!

By: Jim Rosebrock

Jim Rosebrock — Sun, 25 Jan 2009 14:30:47 +0000

A well written story. I am a volunteer at Antietam and there is a monument to Clara Barton at the park. She helped many people throughout her life but it all started at the Battle of Antietam. Thanks for choosing such an important person to write about.

By: Nancy

Nancy — Sat, 24 Jan 2009 05:27:14 +0000

Great Job Sarah! You write very well.

By: Lisa

Lisa — Sat, 24 Jan 2009 00:31:40 +0000

Well written. Thank you for helping us to understand the role Clara played in the Civil War. Do you know about the female spies in the Civil War? They played a very important role and were so very brave too.